647 Posts
EP
EXP
Total
"The Aussie"
|
Ash
May 24, 2020 21:00:15 GMT -4
Post by sporky on May 24, 2020 21:00:15 GMT -4
Hey there! I'm Sporky, and I'll be looking at your app today.
History and personality look good!
Regarding the Quirk, it's looking alright, but something to be looked at:
Infusion: The ability to 'absorb' things on its own does not require an ability, necessarily - as it is simply the required activation for your Quirk, it does not need to take up a 'benefit' slot. Feel free to replace this with, say, range. However, please do keep in the restriction on absorbing living things.
I'd also like to see the description simplified a bit - a sentence or two at the start to give the 'gist' of the Quirk (absorbing and expelling, putty flesh) would be good before getting into the technical stuff.
Now, regarding abilities, both look good, however please replace the 'ability name' with the names of the abilities. Furthermore, starting abilities start at F rank (only Quirk starts at E rank).
Once these changes are done, resubmit for another look!
|
|