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May 12, 2020 17:42:34 GMT -4
Post by sk on May 12, 2020 17:42:34 GMT -4
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May 12, 2020 19:07:36 GMT -4
Post by sk on May 12, 2020 19:07:36 GMT -4
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"Miss-Many-Thread"
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May 16, 2020 17:02:11 GMT -4
Post by Rosey on May 16, 2020 17:02:11 GMT -4
Hey there, I am Rosey and I will looking over your Character app today!
First of all; what we mean with Player name is the online handle you use for discord for example, so please fill in how you would like to be known. (This can be of course the same name as your character but than pick one of the versions).
The rest of your profile seems fine.
Now to your quirk, I need a few more details on the description of your benefits. Because you use a summon the use of your benefits need to be filled in to say who has the benefit, does Skarleth heal or is it the summon that can do that? Also for ease of your profile I suggest to fill in the description that we have in rules and information about what you can heal, how the regen works and how far the distance is for your enhanced senses, this so you can look at your profile in one go (this is a recommendation, not necessary).
Also in your description you mention that your summon will no longer have the damage when they are unsummoned and resummoned, this is not the case in one thread. Your summon would keep the same damage else you will be in top power everytime you resummon. So please change the wording of this sentence.
Just a general note for your abilities, if you summon multiple summons they all share the F-rank durability, this means they don't get it individual. In hopefully easier words: You summon one creature, it will have F-rank durability. You summon two or more, they still have only F-rank durability shared over the two of them (or more of them).
If you have any questions, feel free to ask staff, when done resubmit a link in Character Submission thread :)
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May 23, 2020 14:41:08 GMT -4
Post by Rosey on May 23, 2020 14:41:08 GMT -4
Hey me again!
This part still sounds a bit the same considering the resummoning from before. I would just delete it, the system is overall described in the rules. Your summon would be without damage when you enter a new thread or had time enough to heal or regenerate if you have those abilities.
I would change the wording of your "The proficiency of this is at E-rank in strength." at enhanced senses as this might be confusing, you should add "this is within the range of 10-12 meters.
I have a more general question about your quirk, when I read the weaknesses and keep in mind your specialist ability I imagine that your summons look like animals, your every day, global form of animals, arranging from bears to zebras so to say. When I read your description however it sounds like fantasy creatures like hydras and minotaurs are available too, if it is like this latter part, I would have to ask you to send a personal message on the board to Primula/Esperia, because their quirk looks quite a lot like this one and we have the politeness rule to ask the person if they are okay with having the same sort of quirk~
Edit: Also, you would need range for your summons to be quite a bit away from Meghan. + If you want range for your summon's attacks (if you plan to give them that later) they would need range as well. So you have two versions: Range for Meghan: this means the summon can be a maximum amount of meters away from her, without range they need to be quite close around her. (below 4 meters) Range for your Summon(s): if they ever get an attack form, they could use this by making distance attacks, depending on how you want to do it of course, this is for range attacks, you don't need it if you want them to be closed combat fighters in the future or no attacks at all!
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