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Santa
May 24, 2018 11:02:40 GMT -4
Post by Deleted on May 24, 2018 11:02:40 GMT -4
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Alejandro Santa
25 || Heterosexual || Male || Vigilante
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PERSONALITY
POSITIVE ✔ Ambitious ✔ Strong-willed ✔ Easy-going ✔ Observant ✔ Calculating
NEGATIVE ✖ Lecherous ✖ Obsessive ✖ Insensitive ✖ Dogmatic ✖ Blunt
LIKES ✔ People ✔ Novelty ✔ Movies ✔ Lists ✔ Big boobs
DISLIKES ✖ Bad Cooking ✖ Outdoors ✖ Drama ✖ Repetition ✖ Routine
PERSONALITY He's an enthusiastic fellow, seemingly always able to see the bright side on things, along always having a grand scheme in mind. However, this sometimes works against him as he's apparently numb to the idea of a "bad situation". Everything will work out, in his mind, largely due to his large amounts of self-confidence and neglect for consequences.
| APPEARANCE HEIGHT: 1,89 m WEIGHT: 89kg HAIR/STYLE: Entirely hairless SKIN/SCARS: Olive skin EYES: Black. NOTABLES: -
He has a lanky, but athletic build. His body also lacks any sort of hair, so he has no eyebrows and is entirely bald. His ethnicity is a mix of Latino and Scandinavian, earning him a lot of height and dark skin. |
HISTORY Alejandro was brought up in a very average home, but his ambition was a lot greater than the low-middle class upbringing he had could provide. He had an innate desire to change the world and to understand its secrets.
Quirks fascinated him from a very young age, but he felt like a lot of its scientific progress has already been made on all of the "easy" parts - the parts that were allowed. What about the rest? The extremes?
This frustrated him during his early youth, and the bottled up feeling finally erupted once he got into university, where he could finally perform his unconventional research. However, he went too far with with experiments on humans, by submitting them to too much harm and danger, and was sent to prison for his crimes.
However, his research continued within the jail bars, and he managed to arrange a deal to get elderly and terminal inmates to become his new guinea pigs. The government, surprised with his findings via these unconventional means, eventually struck a new deal with him - to have him freed in exchange for further research. His study would basically be his "community service" for his crimes.
He agreed. However, even once free, he started to burn through experimentation subjects quite quickly - he would need more if he were to progress at the pace he wanted. And so, he got another agreement with the government. They would help each other: he would become their vigilante, and in exchange, he would have 20% of the body of what he caught for his research.
And so currently, he wears a helmet. It's a safety device by the government, to make sure he doesn't escape, given that he's still on a sort of parole.
He has also started to earn a good standing at a local orphanage by being a volunteer there, although the police still don't know if this is all an act or genuine good behavior. So far he seems to be quite popular there, though.
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Cuddlebeam, Bondrewd - Made in Abyss
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Santa
May 24, 2018 11:02:58 GMT -4
Post by Deleted on May 24, 2018 11:02:58 GMT -4
AbilitiesMundane Abilities
Quirk Studies Rank: F Effect: He's well-acquainted with most common knowledge regarding Quirks.
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| Abilities Stamina Type: Enhancement Rank: F Effect: He has developed a surprising amount of stamina, due to his restless nights dedicated to research.
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QuirkInstant Present Type: Emitter Rank: F Effect: By touching something, he can make a layer of wrapping instantly appear on it made of a special material (it's nearly identical to conventional gift wrapping, just a lot more resistant).
This "gift wrapping" he produces can be torn, although with a good amount of effort, with a "weapon" which is equal to the rank of this quirk (F-rank Strength can tear through it, F-rank swords can eventually cut through, etc). Higher rank "weapons" can break it with ease. The layer of wrapping produced is otherwise hermetic, skin-tight and makes moving difficult; very much like a good layer of real gift wrapping.
Currently, he can wrap a medium-sized person at most with a single use of his power (he can't wrap a bodybuilder, for example). Larger things, such as cars, cannot be wrapped entirely in one go.
Drawback: He has no hair on his body, making him look a bit less aesthetic than most. Additionally, like nearly all quirks, his quirk depletes his stamina per each use. He is also very allergic to real gift wrapping, touching it makes his skin start to swell unless treated.
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Santa
May 25, 2018 12:59:53 GMT -4
Post by Deleted on May 25, 2018 12:59:53 GMT -4
Hello Cuddlebeam and welcome to True Path!
I'll be doing the first round of reviewing your character and hopefully getting you onto the road to approval. Regarding your quirk, there is an issue right now in that if your character touches another one, it will result in them being effectively immediately incapacitated, unless they happen to have the right counter to his quirk. To avoid this please make it so that he shoots out layers of wrapping rather than doing it instantly by touch, and rather than having them immediately wrap a whole person, they can wrap parts of it. Please also note that quirks start at E rank.
Finally add an overuse drawback and please elaborate on what his allergy to wrapping paper means. What component of it is he allergic to? What about normal paper? That's all for now.
Arkwright
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Santa
May 26, 2018 13:25:08 GMT -4
Post by Darren Blanco II on May 26, 2018 13:25:08 GMT -4
Adding to what my boi Ark said, there's also some problems with the story, mainly the fact that he is in a government contract to get criminals as guinea pigs, as heroes are supposed to be law enforcement and very public and we don't think this how the Japanese government treats criminals in our world.
So add that to the list of edit, ping us, and we'll take a look again! Good luck with your app!
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