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Post by Deleted on Apr 19, 2019 14:16:10 GMT -4
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Post by Deleted on Jul 23, 2019 16:54:45 GMT -4
ARISU DISUKODO QUIRK INFORMATION Quirk Antipyre Type: Emitter Rank: C Description: Arisu can project and control a blue-black flame-like energy using her arms. It doesn't burn living things or materials, and emits neither heat nor light, but exhausts living things and energy sources while rendering substances fragile to the point a simple punch or its own weight could cause them to collapse. Benefits:- C-rank Exhaustion effect on living targets
- C-rank "erosion" effect against materials/energy
- C-rank Stamina
Exhaustion and Weakness: Arisu is not immune to the effects of her own ability- using it is an imperfect science at best, and small amounts of the substance leak into her veins when it is in use. Mild to moderate overuse erodes the iron in her blood and leaves her anemic and tired- extreme overuse could leak the substance into her heart, stopping it temporarily and rendering her unconscious immediately- or in the worst possible case, stop it permanently if completely abused beyond her limits.COMBAT ABILITIES Blackfire Brawler Rank: F Effect: Before Arisu realized she couldn't set anything on fire, she kept her flames close, wrapped around her hands instead of launched all over the place. She has a long way to go with regards to actual combat application, but has some practice ducking and weaving, and can punch hard enough to splinter wood (F-rank Boxing skills).
Antipyre Propulsion Rank: F Effect: Arisu has perfected the most basic propulsion maneuvers she can think of by using bursts of Antipyre to launch herself around. She can currently change direction in ways that would otherwise be impossible (making sharp turns at full tilt sprints, 180 degree about-faces without loss of speed), vertical or horizontal lunges across smaller rooms and gaps (5m or so), and allowing her to eliminate or reduce damage from falls, provided she is conscious to do so (F-rank flight).
Accelerated Tactics Rank: E Effect: Extended practice with her own physical training and her propulsion techniques have raised Arisu's top speed significantly, allowing her to both run faster and control sustained blackfire burns to increase her maneuvering speeds as well. She can now reach speeds comparable with an olympic sprinter whether on foot or using her propulsion techniques (E-rank speed).
Hardknock Harrier Rank: E Effect: Arisu has perfected the basic steps of using Antipyre defensively. By lining her arms or other body parts with the chilling flame to protect herself and numb her perception of pain, this continued exposure to the draining energy has left her enured to pain and enables her to take the same sort of beating required to put down an olympic-level athlete. Note: This ability is currently at F-rank: I would like to purchase E rank with 200xp.
Riotous Reach Rank: F Effect: Arisu has started to re-learn how to manipulate her flames away from her body, giving her enough control to reach the walls of a decent-sized classroom from its center (5m range). Note: This ability has been added to replace her F-rank stamina ability Exhaustion Expert, which is now incorporated into her quirk.
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Post by sporky on Jul 28, 2019 19:28:48 GMT -4
Hey there! The updates looks mostly good, just need a bit of clarification regarding her benefits:
For her Exhaustion, a little bit mentioning the potency of this effect and more clearly how its rendered would be appreciated!
Regarding her Erosion effect, would this allow defensive effects too, or is this just essentially a damage ability flavored against only non-living materials?
For her Stamina effect, just a small bit on how her Quirk provides her stamina would be good!
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